2. Consider the similarities and
differences between editing and
revision. How can using digital tools
enhance this process?
3. “IF STUDENTS ARE TO BECOME BETTER WRITERS, THEY NEED TO RECOGNIZE THAT SOMETIMES
THEIR FIRST IDEA IS NOT ALWAYS THEIR BEST IDEA….SADLY, THESE STUDENTS HAVE NOT
BEEN TAUGHT THAT THEIR BEST IDEA MAYBE YET TO COME. THEIR RICHEST THINKING MAY BE
FOUND IN THEIR SECOND, FIFTH, OR NINTH IDEA.” (229)
Kelly Gallagher Write Like This
Copyright 2010 3
4. “IN A NATIONAL SURVEY OF 560 OTHERWISE SUCCESSFUL SECONDARY
TEACHERS OF WRITING AND 715 OF THEIR STUDENTS, SARAH W. FREEDMAN
(THE ROLE OF RESPONSE IN ACQUISITION OF WRITTEN LANGUAGE, BERKELEY:
CALIFORNIA UP) FOUND THAT MANY TEACHERS GRIEVED OVER THE USE OF
PEER-RESPONSE GROUPS BECAUSE THEY HAD DIFFICULTY GETTING STUDENTS TO
RESPOND EFFECTIVELY TO ONE ANOTHER’S WRITING.”
THIS ARTICLE APPEARED ON PAGES 52-56
IN THE SEPTEMBER 1990
ISSUE OF ENGLISH JOURNAL.
COPYRIGHT
COUNCIL OF TEACHERS OF ENGLISH. REPRINTED WITH PERMISSION.
5. Holly French &
Janet Ilko
San Diego CUE
Conference
November 15, 2014
“Beyond Editing:
Using Googledocs
for Student
Revision Groups”
San Diego Area Writing
Project
6. My Story: Holly French
On the Digital Learning Continuum
My Past
Learner vs Presenter
Consumer, NOT producer
My Present
• Consumer: Educational sites
Presenter: SDAWP
• Mentor: Digital Editing
• Advocate: Digital Learning Days
7. My Story: Janet Ilko
On the Digital Learning Continuum
My Past
Self-prescribed Technophobe
Technology vs. Teaching
Consumer, NOT producer
My Present
• Consumer: Social Media, Educational
Sites
• Producer: Writing in my Hand (Blog)
• Writingforchange.net
• Mentor: Student Blogs, Digital Editing
• Advocate: Digital Learning Days
8. 20th vs. 21st Century Pedagogy
No Child Left Behind Common Core
12. Writing For Change
What if your district has all
the tools and resources
available for educators?
• Tipping Point
• Digital Continuum
• Integrated Pedagogy
• Impact On Students
Add Your Video!
13. Agency is
the capacity
of a person
to act in the
world.
Allows
individuals to
adapt,
persevere and
succeed despite
adversity.
On-going
opportunity
to
resources/ex
periences in
education.
NWP Values
• Real World Purpose
• Authentic Audience
• Personal Investment
14. The writer believes there is some
good in the original piece
The writer believes the writing
can be made better.
The writer has some reason to
make it better.
The writer has some plan for
figuring out how to make it
better.
Four Principles Toward Teaching the
Craft of Revisions
23. Mentor Sentences
Using mentor sentences for revision is a springboard to
the process.
Daily Warm Up:
SIMILE:
A boom of thunder startled them and like leaves before a new hurricane, they tumbled
upon each other and ran.
excerpt from “All Summer in a Day” by Ray Bradbury
Your Original Sentence:
They sent scientists and geographers to find human bones, using tools from their 4x4
truck.
Your Imitation Sentence:
The clank of the tools startled them and like kangaroos jumping in the air, they looked
down and found human bones and ran to the truck.
24. Mentor Text Practice for Today:
• Use the two mentor text sentences in
your packet as your springboard to
revising your writing.
25. Like my students you read text and created a summary of the article.
Now you will go through the process my students experienced in peer editing.
• Open document
• Share with a peer
• Each person reads his/her text to the group
• Members add comments
One Positive
One Constructive
• Repeat with all members
Your Turn to Comment
Respond in writing to share with a partner (5 min)
10 min approx
At 25 min approx.
Reading and Writing (15 min)
40 min approx
Spent so much time, best ever, It is all good and doesn’t need change.
Teaching writing for 12 years and little success with revision until now.
Daily practice beneficial in allowing students to see themselves as writers.
Template in packet
With my students I did a fishbowl activity to model how to comment. We had previously reviews social and academic commenting.
In packet “How to Respond to Writing”
Add video here!!!!! (2 min)
55 min approx
Student sample
Use colored text to show changes
5 min
Review (2)
Find a partner and exchange g-mail accounts Watch the presentations and then begin the share process. (5 Min)
Watch the presentations and then begin the peer revision process. One person reads others listen then silently comment in googledocs
Repeat
85 min approx